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Betrayl
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Posted 3 months ago
As the pain washes over me, Tremors ravage my frame periodically My eyes swim with stinging tears, As my brain comes to terms with my darkest fears Gone, abandoned, seperated, alas, My future obscure as i will live in the past Holding on to the memories tight, Grasping for the ever fading light. These tears shall fall on shattered remains. |
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| Posted 3 months ago Who told you it is not good? It is brilliant ...
Just..... alas past periodically me, don't seems to rhyme .. otherwise it is good. Cloud shattered and fall into pieces,
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| Posted about 1 month ago the only line i didnt like was the fourth other than that its good |
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| Posted about 1 month ago its good,fer sure do i realy look like i care?! |
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| Posted about 1 month ago cept line four |
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| Posted about 1 month ago wats wrong wit line 4 do i realy look like i care?! |
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| Posted about 1 month ago yea whats wrong with line four eat? i honestly thought the whole thing was crap but i couldnt delete it cz this schmuck (dnt ask) had already posted a comment... a lame one at that *sigh* if you wanna read one thats semi-good or at least better than this one, go to alive poets thingy..im not advertising or anything...just saying lol and Vamp...thanks xD These tears shall fall on shattered remains. |
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| Posted about 1 month ago i dunno line four just disrupted the flow for me is all |
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| Posted about 1 month ago oh.. did it remind you of something... hahaha These tears shall fall on shattered remains. |
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| Posted about 1 month ago damnit not again lol |
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| Posted about 1 month ago lol you started it! i was serious when i used it the first time then you came along and made fun of me the second haha its ONNNN xD These tears shall fall on shattered remains. |
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| Posted about 1 month ago yeh i know u were serious thanx for that but i couldnt resist so u better watch your back and everywhere else |
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| Posted about 1 month ago covers her "sensitive" parts im being HARASSED and you totally went all bitchy on me the first time lol poor z and joshua started fighting over it for gods sake...haha These tears shall fall on shattered remains. |
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| Posted about 1 month ago lol shush ur making ppl stare and i wasnt bitchy i barely said anything and _Z was annoying me lol |
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| Posted about 1 month ago lol bitchay watever i forgive you sweetheart cz its NOW obvious that you are...always like that haha jk schizo was concerned is all...her farting buddy was going haywire and the consquences couldve been...fatal ....for everyone v.v These tears shall fall on shattered remains. |
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| Posted about 1 month ago did i ask for your forgiveness?lol
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| Posted about 1 month ago was not concerned just like messing with her when she gets all moody lol im a million different people from one day to the next |
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| Posted about 1 month ago v.v does nothing i say come of any value anymore? FINE...whatever. These tears shall fall on shattered remains. |
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| Posted about 1 month ago lol dont be so sensitive i was being stupid schizo taught me that and she cares she just doest like to admit it LOL |
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| Posted about 1 month ago DO NOT! im a million different people from one day to the next |
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| Posted about 1 month ago yawn....im uber sleepy do i realy look like i care?! |
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| Posted about 1 month ago *chants like a little schoolgirl* you carrre you carrre LOL i was kidding EAT i follow my own advice...dont take peoples crap seriously on tickle..or anywhere else for that matter These tears shall fall on shattered remains. |
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| Posted about 1 month ago ummm.....ya....*yawn* do i realy look like i care?! |
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| Posted about 1 month ago somebody has isses lol lol i dont understand why ppl on tickle are so sensitive i kinder think the whole thing is a joke im a million different people from one day to the next |
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| Posted about 1 month ago *struggles to control temper* HERES AN IDEA go sleep. These tears shall fall on shattered remains. |
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| Posted about 1 month ago I JUST WOKE UP. do i realy look like i care?! |
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| Posted about 1 month ago and i kinder think you cant spell and your signature is offensive for some reason z o.O These tears shall fall on shattered remains. |
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| Posted about 1 month ago vampire_heart_13 says ...
then shut up. These tears shall fall on shattered remains. |
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| Posted about 1 month ago you shut up. do i realy look like i care?! |
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| Posted about 1 month ago OK STOP |
